Rough cut / feedback / Shooting day 5

The teachers feedback following our rough cut made us view it from a more professional point of view, we hadn't began the face pace editing which is needed for the track yet this was meant to be one of the main features, and it wasn't in the rough cut. The comments our teacher made were:

- the pace of the editing does not mirror the fast pace of the track as of yet
- the narrative has no elaboration, the flashbacks are not identified and at first watch you would not establish their meaning (referring to the kebab shop)
- particular shots looked wrong,
for example this is one of the cuts during out introduction, we initially reversed the footage and overlaid it, so the people around him were walking both forwards and backward, we thought this would create more atmosphere however after it being pointed out, it was unnecessary and cluttered. The screen shots below depict this change.


Although she was unsure of our rough cut because of these aspects, she did reassure us by complimenting the use of shots and lighting. We just needed to work faster, time manage better and edit to a higher standard. We took all of this constructive criticism on board and progressed straight away. By desaturating the flash backs of Will and Paige in the kebab shot it managed to differentiate between the two clearly, also a 'soft edge' effect was applied to add a subtle vignette to the shot.
We were aware all along that we did not have enough raged emotion and movement footage which would enable us to edit to the consistently fast pace of the track well. Also to establish more of a narrative and give weight to our protagonists violent and drastic actions, we needed to establish their previous happy and intimate relationship through the use of memories.

So another filming session to capture intimacy of memory was needed to enhance our video.. Back to my house!
We used my bedroom to host the intimate flashbacks in our protagonists mind, red lighting in my room was used and enhance the passion of the atmosphere. Slow hand held camera movement and close ups were extremely important to display the personal interaction between the two and capture the connection. We took inspiration from Glass Jaws video and shot some sections blury.
We also used this opportunity to shot some strong movement which we could edit to match the fast pace in the middle of the track, we used the fish eye lens again to create a sense of disorientation, the vivid red colouring and the very dark shadows are visually confusing yet this is a good factor, as it will entice the audience to re watch the video to pick up on the detail. Changing between long shots, point of view shots and close ups will increase this dramatic scene.